1-23-09: Voice (A Days)

Today we turned in the following:
Introductory paragraph and Outline for the essay you will eventually write on the driving age.
Writer's Notebook #3
Punctual Pieces 1/12-1/23 (6 total)

For our punctual piece today, we rewrote a portion of President Obama's Inaugural Address as if either Miss Teen South Carolina or Sarah Palin would have said it.




Here is the portion of President Obama's speech:

"For everywhere we look, there is work to be done. The state of the economy calls for action, bold and swift, and we will act — not only to create new jobs, but to lay a new foundation for growth. We will build the roads and bridges, the electric grids and digital lines that feed our commerce and bind us together. We will restore science to its rightful place, and wield technology's wonders to raise health care's quality and lower its cost. We will harness the sun and the winds and the soil to fuel our cars and run our factories. And we will transform our schools and colleges and universities to meet the demands of a new age. All this we can do. All this we will do."

After we completed our Punctual Piece, we had reading time.

Then we talked about how important Voice is in our writing. Voice should help you feel the author behind the writing. It should help you connect with the author or speaker. Voice should also be appropriate to the situation. If Miss South Carolina gave President Obama's speech, we wouldn't take her very seriously, would we. So if we are writing a paper in an academic setting, we need to be more formal in our tone.

You were given the rest of the period to read and score two essays. Just like we have done with the Ideas and Organization, you read though the essays and used your rubric on VOICE to give each of the two essays a score--justifying the score you gave each essay.

Then you had time to complete the Investigation sheet for the essay on Iago and the Revision sheet for the essay on food. If you didn't finish, this assignment will be due on Tuesday.

For Tuesday:
1. Complete the Investigation and Revision Sheets for the Voice Essays
2. Get caught up if you are behind!